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I was going to cry,
But then...
...I didn't.

The feelings were there,
wedged tight...
...deep inside.

I could feel the tears welling,
filling...
...my soul.

Then suddenly
they just...
...grew still.

And the sadness lay on me,
thick...
...and heavy.
There is a poem within the poem. The title applies to both and makes them work, in my opinion. And with the italics going on I tried to make it kind of obvious.
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GaYtAcOs Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this style reminds me of a ellen hopkins book.
she sometimes does that by putting the words that form the other poem on the opposite side of the page
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Dragon-loves-you Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i was just thinking the same thing i love ellen hopkins books
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GaYtAcOs Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
i know right!! she's amazing

if only i could write at least HALF as well as she can
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CrazedByCalliope Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012   Writer
Sad to say I don't know who that is :(
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Dragon-loves-you Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
go to the library and look for some on her books there pretty thick but the trust is the probably a little more or a little less on each page and there addicting i read the book tricks (about 500 and something pages) in a day cuz i couldn't put it down and yes i am a book worm >:D
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CrazedByCalliope Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2012   Writer
Looked up a few, and must say probably not my cup of tea.
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Dragon-loves-you Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
ah ok everyone has different taste if it doesn't tickle your fancy its perfectly fine :D
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finishyourtea Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2012  Student Writer
Oh how I can relate.
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CrazedByCalliope Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012   Writer
Ah, I hope like mine it's at least passing?
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finishyourtea Featured By Owner Feb 7, 2012  Student Writer
Yes =)
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This stole my breath away. Honestly it's been a goal of mine to portray that feeling that you're crying with your very soul, but it dares not leave your eyes.. I have no succeeded yet however. That is why I feel the need to say that this is truly amazing, and I feel that it pulls off that emotion to a T. Just wow! Such potential and creativity brewing, then mixing together to produce such a wonderfully orchestrated poem. All I can think of to say, though I know there a million words my lips could form, is BRAVO! :)
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CrazedByCalliope Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2012   Writer
Thank you, most sincerely.
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Nullibicity Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You are most definitely welcome!! :)
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